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Snerfs
1st June 2008, 03:27 PM
My gf wrote this, wonderin what you guys think... (i put it in the document with this style)

http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn259/daemonman/april.jpg
Chazlene
1st June 2008, 03:34 PM
Nurrgruuhhrhurhmmurhh GRAH! Typo Daemon!!! 11th line, 'too' not 'to' :D.

Nice poem anyway, is it about you? ;) I won't go into any arty farty poem language, but tis good how there isn't too much rhyme, which usually makes poems a tad cheesy.

EDIT: Another one of your threads with a non-descriptive title... :p
Paper Tiger
1st June 2008, 03:43 PM
lol @ Oric

Nice poem. I can look at it from two points of view. Knowing the story behind it and not knowing it... Both are good though XD

Nice one April
Isphera
1st June 2008, 05:36 PM
Why LOL at oric, what did I do?

And awesome picture Daemon....i mean poem. And picture...grah!
Paper Tiger
1st June 2008, 05:50 PM
Picking out the typo and about the non descriptive post title XD
Isphera
1st June 2008, 05:59 PM
That was Chaz, not me....
Paper Tiger
1st June 2008, 06:17 PM
What the hell.... I could have sworn I saw your name, not Chaz's...
Calneon
1st June 2008, 06:22 PM
IMO, lines 14 and 15 would sound better with an added syllable:

"And then they kiss.
Their eyes closed shut,"

I think it just flows a bit better. Other than that, fantastic poem. Lucky you, she's very talented ;).
Snerfs
1st June 2008, 07:19 PM
Lucky you, she's very talented ;).

i know ;) :P
Bloo
1st June 2008, 07:27 PM
Very good poem. She's a very talented poet! I was worried what it was going to be about by the black rose (or whatever flower it is) at first though. :P
Isphera
1st June 2008, 09:48 PM
Lucky you, she's very talented ;).

I could take this in two ways.... :)

No, I should stop doing this, it's harsh on Daemon, and makes me looks like a spaz :D
Snerfs
1st June 2008, 09:56 PM
its not harsh, for all you know, it could be true, but unluckily for you, its only for me to know, MUWHAHAHAHAHA
VoX
2nd June 2008, 05:21 PM
Wow, nice poem, I've got bad mental images of you and her from that...
Midge
2nd June 2008, 07:27 PM
vox is actually getting thrills from the mental images of u 2, u know he is...

...dirty pervert
ez64
2nd June 2008, 07:38 PM
poems?...... POEMS????, this is not the ATK forum I am lost :(
VoX
2nd June 2008, 07:51 PM
Bugger off Midge. :p
Midge
2nd June 2008, 08:54 PM
awww why u getting defensive? truth been revealed? haha!
VoX
3rd June 2008, 04:54 PM
Oh shut up and go smoke the fumes that came out of your PSU.
Midge
3rd June 2008, 09:24 PM
lolz!!!
Calneon
3rd June 2008, 10:05 PM
Hey VOX! Theres places you can go for that...

Stop contaminating the forum with your dirty mind.
Target
4th June 2008, 12:13 PM
Good poem, lots of talent :P