Wow...

My gf wrote this, wonderin what you guys think... (i put it in the document with this style)

http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/n...nman/april.jpg

Nurrgruuhhrhurhmmurhh GRAH! Typo Daemon!!! 11th line, 'too' not 'to' :D.

Nice poem anyway, is it about you? ;) I won't go into any arty farty poem language, but tis good how there isn't too much rhyme, which usually makes poems a tad cheesy.

EDIT: Another one of your threads with a non-descriptive title... :p

lol @ Oric

Nice poem. I can look at it from two points of view. Knowing the story behind it and not knowing it... Both are good though XD

Nice one April

Why LOL at oric, what did I do?

And awesome picture Daemon....i mean poem. And picture...grah!

Picking out the typo and about the non descriptive post title XD

That was Chaz, not me....

What the hell.... I could have sworn I saw your name, not Chaz's...

IMO, lines 14 and 15 would sound better with an added syllable:

"And then they kiss.
Their eyes closed shut,"

I think it just flows a bit better. Other than that, fantastic poem. Lucky you, she's very talented ;).

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Originally Posted by Phantom

Lucky you, she's very talented ;).

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i know ;) :P

Very good poem. She's a very talented poet! I was worried what it was going to be about by the black rose (or whatever flower it is) at first though. :P

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Originally Posted by Phantom

Lucky you, she's very talented ;).

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I could take this in two ways.... :)

No, I should stop doing this, it's harsh on Daemon, and makes me looks like a spaz :D

its not harsh, for all you know, it could be true, but unluckily for you, its only for me to know, MUWHAHAHAHAHA

Wow, nice poem, I've got bad mental images of you and her from that...

vox is actually getting thrills from the mental images of u 2, u know he is...

...dirty pervert

poems?...... POEMS????, this is not the ATK forum I am lost :(